[Dan Warner]

Melissa, this is a really strong start. You clearly came in prepared and connected, and your commitment to the moment is evident throughout the tape. There’s a natural presence to you that’s very watchable. This was thoughtful, honest work, and you should feel good about it.

The only adjustment I’d suggest is dialing back some of the facial expressions just a bit. The camera is incredibly sensitive and it picks up everything. So if your character is scared or nervous, we’ll feel it even if you’re just experiencing it internally. You don’t have to show us those feelings; let them live inside you. The less you indicate, the more magnetic the performance becomes. Also, you don’t need any transitions between takes.

Again, really nice work here. You’re definitely on the right path. Just remember—be a real person, in a real place, having a real experience. That’s where the magic lives. Keep going!