[Dan Warner]

Bobbie,

Really nice work on this practice script.
You made some smart choices and brought a natural, nervous energy to the character that felt authentic and layered. I liked the way you used your space. The time you took at the top of the piece to settle in was good also, it gave the moment room to breathe and grounded your performance.

Your movement and use of the frame were excellent. You clearly understood how to stay connected while still giving the performance physical life, which can be tough on tape.

Between the two takes, I did prefer the second one—it had a quieter stillness that was more compelling. But the first take also had some bold moments that I appreciated and it showed you’re not afraid to explore different layers.

In that second take I liked your vocal variety and pacing, and those small eye darts said a lot without forcing anything. It was subtle and specific.

If I had one note, it would be at the very end—the dramatic peak could have been slightly more internalized. Instead of pushing the emotion outward, maybe just sit in the uncertainty a beat longer. Sometimes the quietest moment is the most powerful.

All in all, really nice job. This was thoughtful, well-prepared work that shows you’re growing in all the right ways. Keep going—you’re on the right track.