[Dan Warner]

Hey Denise,

Nice work on this self-tape. Again, I liked the simplicity with the piece. It never felt pushed or performed. You kept it grounded. You seemed to have trusted the moment, which was nice.

To push it even further and make it really compelling , it would’ve been great to see a bit more of the memory working through you. As if you were really recalling the event as you told it to the police. Maybe even struggling a little to find the words because of how hard it is to talk about. Let us see that internal work too. You don’t need to show us much, just a bit of that weight before the words come out.

But again, thank you for making a simple thing simple. That’s a skill. Really nice work. Keep going.

Let me know if you have any questions about this.